Avoid the Common Markers of Amateurish Writing
The first step toward enhancing your writing skills is to avoid the common markers of amateurish writing. We’ll begin our discussion with overintensity, afterwards called “wow” in this article.
Wow often pops up in the material clients send me. I don’t mind because with a search and replace passes I can remove it, thereby vastly improving the piece quickly. You could do the same instead of paying me to do it for you.
Good writing doesn’t need intensification because it’s tight, vivid, and informative. When you sit down to revise your first draft, take out what isn’t tight, vivid, and informative-it will always improve your writing.
In wow writing, nothing is simply hot, big, unique or whatever-it’s always very hot, very big, or-impossibly-very unique. (A thing is either unique, or not unique.) Logically, something could be “very unusual,” but why not just “unusual?”
Very
If you use “very” more than once in a thousand words, you’re overusing it. Just by deleting almost every “very” your writing becomes a considerably tighter, swifter, and a more professional read. But the overuse of very is merely the tip of overintensification. Let’s look at several more forms of this writing disease.
The Bang
Overuse of the bang (the exclamation point) is probably the most egregious form of wow. The triple bang !!! is more so, of course, but the infamous quintuple bang (!!!!!) must be the most egregious. The bang tells the reader, “Wake up and pay attention because you just read something terribly witty or astonishing. You would have missed it, dumbo, if I hadn’t given it a bang!”
Never use a bang if you can avoid it. Make your writing tight and vivid so your readers will be intrigued and continue reading your stuff. Always write and punctuate with the style and purpose that lets your readers decide what amazes them.
Multiple Question Marks (???)
Using more than one question mark is always a no-no unless you’re a teenager writing love letters. Then it’s cool-until you’re about 14 when you realize it’s kid stuff.
ALL CAPS
This one comes naturally to inexperienced writers. Used infrequently, one or a few all-caps words can make an idea jump off the page; used often, it gives your work a chaotic look because every all-caps entry clamors for attention. All-caps have a noisy feel, like a train roaring past under your window. If you’re writing a novel about street crime and gang warfare, a chaotic style may be just the thing, but it’s not if your book is nonfiction.
Where’s the line between infrequent use and overuse? Up to three instances in a 200-page book is infrequent; once in each chapter is overuse. Although upper and lower case is more readable, it’s okay to use all caps in headings.
However, when ALL CAPS appears in the body of an upper and lower case paragraph (as in this one) almost always it’s a case of pure wow. Blotches of all caps subtly tell the reader to skip the rest of the paragraph.
Rogue Capitalization
“Capitalization” refers to capitalizing only the first letter of a word, in contrast to all caps. Capitalizing invented terms is author intrusion, generally a risky proposition because it diverts reader attention from the message. This comes up frequently in my work with clients. However, the capitalization of invented terms is a useful technique if used consistently and with great restraint.
A recent project clarified when it’s effective to capitalize a term and when its use becomes excessive. It was effective for a term that also appears in the title of the book, and we limited personification to each repetition of that single term. However, the client had sown capitalized invented terms throughout his manuscript as though he was spreading seeds on the lawn. Clearly excessive. We agreed to lower-case all the other terms he had invented.
Italics
Italics are the most acceptable form of adding emphasis. But use it sparingly. You can for example, italicize only a prefix, as in de-emphasize and make your meaning gently pop out. Italics tend to be confusing unless applied consistently, which can be a greater challenge than one might suspect.
Random Bold Face
Bold Face shouts; italics whisper. Bold Face is legitimately used in headings, but peppering your text with random bold face is another sure way to create choppy looking, gangsta pages. Avoid this in formal writing. In any other kind of communication, if you must use bold face, do so with restraint. Frequent use destroys its shock value; leaving only pages that look like pasted up ransom notes.
In a different book, the primary author had coined about twenty terms and capitalized them to identify people with certain habits, both good and bad. His manuscript used every form of overintensification I had ever encountered. His manuscript looked like an anthology of ransom notes, with all caps, italics, and bold face competing for attention.
Just one more tip on making your writing more vivid: search your next-to-final draft for “nice.” When you find an instance of that meaningless word, it’s 100 to 1 that replacing nice with a stronger, more descriptive adjective will make your writing more vivid. For example, suppose you wrote, “He is a nice old gentleman.” Substitute any of the following for nice and you’ll paint a more vivid picture of the old fellow for your readers: kindly, neat, gaunt, stooped, bright-eyed, red-faced, and so on.
In every activity, the difference between a professional and an amateur is that the pro takes more pains with her or his work. Write your first draft fast; don’t worry about spelling, grammar, wow, or anything else-concentrate on capturing your basic ideas on screen or paper. Then revise, print out, and revise again. And again-until you’re certain you can’t improve on your work. That’s how you give your writing the professional stroke.
All forms of wow make writing more difficult to understand. They divert the readers’ attention from your message to your chaotic style, and thereby lessen their faith in what you’re trying to convey.
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